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Scrap metal yard’s are hardly the obvious places to practise nature conservation, but in Yapton, a small village in Sussex, there is a rather unusual exception. The Yapton Metal Company owned by my parents deals in non-ferrous metals and all kinds of second-hand goods. I run the business and am also a keen naturalist. I try to observe everything that grows, crawls, creeps or flies in the yard.

Here, butterflies haunt the buddleia and thistles that grow out of the gaps among piles of zinc and stainless steel, and up to 14 species have been recorded in a year. Rabbits have happily colonised the vast bramble complex behind sheds made out of doors and gas cookers, and over 50 species of birds are seen each year.

Every year swallows nest in one or more of the sheds. Wrens or robins rear their young successfully in a multitude of strange places – old kettles, lavatory cisterns, even the old chimney of a boiler. Last year, a lesser-spotted woodpecker caused so much interest by drumming on the pole holding up the telephone wires across the yard, and in the spring a female blackbird reared a family of four in an ingenious nest built on a bicycle wheel.

I am currently working on a complete natural history of the scrap yard and, when completed, the quantity and variety of flora and fauna should be impressive if not unique. The history will indicate what is surviving in one of the most unlikely ecological habitats.

(from English writer and editorial trainer Wynford Hicks’ Writing for Journalists).

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Scrap metal yards are hardly the obvious place to practice nature conservation, but in Yapton, a small village in Sussex, there is a rather unusual exception. The Yapton Metal Company, which is owned by my parents, deals in non-ferrous metals and all kinds of second-hand goods. I run the business and am also a keen naturalist. I try to observe everything that grows, crawls, creeps or flies in the yard.

Here, butterflies haunt the buddleia and thistles grow out of the gaps among piles of zinc and stainless steel with up to 14 species having been recorded in a year. Rabbits have happily colonised the vast bramble complex behind sheds. Behind these sheds made out of doors and gas cookers over 50 species of birds are seen each year.

Every year, swallows nest in one or more of the sheds. Wrens or robins rear their young successfully in a multitude of strange places – old kettles, lavatory cisterns, even the old chimney of a boiler. Last year, a lesser-spotted woodpecker caused so much interest by drumming on the pole holding up the telephone wires across the yard. In the spring, a female blackbird reared a family of four in an ingenious nest built on a bicycle wheel.

I am currently working on a complete natural history of the scrap yard and, when completed, the quantity and variety of flora and fauna should be impressive, if not, unique. The history will indicate survival in one of the most unlikely ecological habitats.